So, I have a couple of thoughts here. 1. I wish I wrote more this week, but I had jury duty, which ate up a day. 2. I think these pages are necessary to get right, and I didn’t feel like I was close enough last week. So, I changed up almost everything.
Jebediah motivates the men in a general sense instead of rehashing the fort sequence.
The inciting moment that draws out Everett’s flashback is built on a focused hatred instead of an emotional breakthrough.
Long agrees to help save Everett’s people out of selfishness instead of altruism.
I think the changes are more inline with the characters. I’ve also cleaned up the train sequence to be more readable. So, it’ll probably be a quick episode this week.
Now, Let’s Write This Movie!
Epitaph 101-110v2